tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7609778413406596805.post3572898142314318411..comments2023-06-19T08:32:54.318-07:00Comments on Ophelia Speaking: A Disgruntled Elf and a Funeral Home (part two)Ophelia Ruehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03031355864950104847noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7609778413406596805.post-40553590127685264612017-02-07T23:19:58.881-08:002017-02-07T23:19:58.881-08:00Part Two is just as ambitious as Part One. I like ...Part Two is just as ambitious as Part One. I like your splashes of descriptive imagery here are there (such as the hair sprouting from Lodie's toes). <br /><br />The narrative seems to be 3rd Person limited to Lodie, but when Medleson enters the picture he pulls focus and we go into a flashback connected with his experience. You might want to rethink that strategy -- perhaps save the grandmother narrative for a bit later (and it might be good to deliver the information in dialogue form when/if Lodie and Medleson become better acquainted.) <br /><br />Keep up the good work!Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11740022212557715792noreply@blogger.com